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From Mrs Marshall & Room 14

Wednesday 19 September 2012

The Middles' "Olympics" Production (by Erica)

Do you have any feedback for Erica on her first draft?


A sea of people in front of me. 
Rivers of stars alongside them.
Gymnasts zooming across the stage.
I'm moving to the dances.
Smooth floor underneath me.

2 comments:

  1. HI WWWWWWOOOOOOWWWWWW!good story#1!!!!!from Jilles#1:)
    HAHAHAJAHAHAHA:)
    ::::::::)()

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  2. Cool story Erica I loved how you said " Gymnasts zooming across the stage !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! From your best friend Kaia

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