The Diving Board (by Bronson, age 7)

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Come on Bronson!

People were jumping off super-fast, but my mouth tasted dry.  Water echoed in my ears. My toes tingled on the prickly board.

I could see another person jump, and he did a back flip! I felt jealous because he did it and I didn't. I said to myself "Jump, Bronson! You can do it!"

Then it was silent.

"My turn," said someone.

I smiled and said, "No it's not. It's MY turn", as my feet went off the board and my body felt the air rushing past.