Do you have any feedback for Taylor on her first draft?
My toes were shaking hard. I heard my stepdad counting loudly.
3, 2, 1, go!
Splash! Suddenly we went.
"Help!" I yelled, as I zoomed across the colours of the hydroslide.
My tastebuds tasted chlorine air. The smell was very strong, too. My heart was beating fast. I thought I was going to drown. I was terrified, but I had to keep going.
When I flew out of the hydroslide, I splashed into the pool at the end. I was proud of myself....and it was quite fun.
Great story Taylor! I like how you have described how you felt and the atmosphere of the slide. It was very courageous of you to try the hydroslide. Teno pai!
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