My First Time on the Hydroslide (by Peta, age 7)

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I watch the water go round corners and on the roof. I feel alarmed. Am I going to do it? The screams of children echo in the tunnel, their footsteps running up the ramp thunder all around me.

Come on! You can do it!  a voice behind me says, but I say to myself, "I CAN'T do it".

Suddenly, I change my mind. I look at the water. I look at the slide.

"Right," I say, "This is it. I can do this!" and off I fly.