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From Mrs Marshall & Room 14

Thursday, 20 September 2012

The Bike Ride (by Taya, age 7)

Do you have any feedback for Taya on her writing so far?
Smelling bark off trees as I rode along, with dirt under my wheels. Cold winds whistled through my ears. My sister's voice saying "You can do it!"

 I try my very best. Breathing in fresh air as I go by. I feel so proud of myself as I blast off into the woods. 
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5 comments:

  1. Anonymous27 September 2012 at 14:18

    Could you make your story longer Shamus

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  2. Anonymous29 September 2012 at 12:54

    Hi Taya I like your story. I like how you said smelling bark off trees as I rode along, with dirt under my wheels.

    From your best friend Sarah

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  3. Anonymous13 October 2012 at 15:04

    Hi Taya I love your story when you said " My sister's voice saying " You can do it!"


    From your Best Friend Kaia

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  4. Anonymous17 February 2013 at 13:22

    Great story Taya with lots of description. I think I can remember that exact moment. Keep up the great riding and writing.
    Dad

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  5. Room 1018 April 2013 at 17:27

    Dear Taya I really liked your story!!!

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