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the weekend, I went to the pools.
I was trying to catch my
dad, but he was too fast. I didn’t give up. I tried again and again, then I
caught him!
After that, I saw a bouncy slide in
the pool that you couldn’t dive off. It was a pirate slide and it was blue and
yellow. I went up ten times and my brother went down eight times. Dad had to
hold Ardeka. Mum didn’t go in because she didn’t want to get wet!
Suddenly Mum shouted, “Get out!”
because we were too far from her. We did, and she dried us with the towel.
We got a milkshake, then I
said, “Can we stay here for a little bit longer?” Mum said, “Ok,” and we said,
“Thank you!”
Mum said, “Have fun!” and
we said, “We will!”
I went to the hydroslide
then and I had so much fun.
Taine, well done on a FANTASTIC piece of writing! In this recount, you chose a topic that lots of your audience can relate to, because they've been to Moana Pool, too! Not only that, but you worked super-hard to keep giving your audience the information they need to be able to "see" your fun day in their minds. Keep up the good work!
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To Hadlee.I REALLY like how you used beautiful colours out of playdoh. From Taylor.
ReplyDeleteOh! Taine! What great writing you have done.
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